Music career

In a study conducted to study the effects of the vice on the American economy

Grammatical Resource:
Verb forms
Prepositions
Punctuation
Example:
In a study conducted to study the effects of the vice on the American economy, it was found that over 70,000 Americans working in the music industry lost their jobs because of music piracy, while there a loss of over $2billion which was lost in form of wages, which were to be paid to the people who lost their jobs(Kernfeld, 2011) .” changed to: “In a study conducted on the effects of music piracy to the American economy, it was found that over 70,000 Americans working in the music industry lost their jobs because of music piracy, while there was a loss of over $2 billion, which was lost in form of wages that were to be paid to people who lost their jobs (Kernfeld, 2011).” >
Lexical Resource:
Effective arrangement of words
Word choice
Tautology
Example:
to console people with grief” changed to: “to console grieving people” >
Diction Management:
Presentation of own views and ideas
Relevance of utterances
Linking ability
Example:
For example, a person singing another person’s music on the streets while walking or while at home doing his or her chores is considered to be stealing another person’s music. However, that is not usually the case in the real world, as many people are singing their favorite songs as they go on with their duties. In such a case, scholars argue that the federal government can prosecute a person who is singing another person’s songs in public without the owner’s consent.” -this seems to be a shallow/inappropriate example >
Bibliography:
Credibility of sources
I n-text use of sources

Comments:
Neely, K. D. is not cited in the text. Some information are not referenced. There are a few awkward statements.

 

………………………Answer preview……………………….

Music piracy is a big issue in the United States, many websites believe that music should be free, and records label it is stealing. Many artists are greatly suffering from music piracy, which eventually negatively affects their music career……………………..

APA
1266 words

Get instant access to the full solution from yourhomeworksolutions by clicking the purchase button below